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Post by siffyleafylav on Sept 25, 2011 17:26:15 GMT -5
Now. Just a few things I would like to say before you go and read this one. I wasn't prepared to post this chapter so very late, and I apologize for my sloppiness. I apologize if it seems rushed, I apologize if it seems so unlikely. But there is one thing I will not apologize for. And that is being the cause of anticipation, frustration, and above all humiliation I am about to make you people feel. Enjoy. EDIT: Oh you guys are making me blush! Thankyou! Attachments:
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beccawolf16
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"From this angle, she's an angel."
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Post by beccawolf16 on Sept 25, 2011 18:08:28 GMT -5
YOU. ARE. AMAZING.
No seriously, I'm very near tears about now. Just... the emotions in this are so strong. The conflicting feelings turmoiling inside of Francoeur were written so perfectly, his love for Lucille is so powerful, yet he feels he cannot be with her! It's a bit tragic, but strangely beautiful, and I congragulate you on such a job so wonderfully done!
I find this to not seem rushed or sloppy at all, but it was definatly a bit unexpected. I did read your little story spoilers, but you added so much more to this than that, I hardly feel spoiled at all. The way Francoeur describes his love for Lucille is really what got to me, I think. I'm pretty sure I was saying "aww" the entire time. And the ending, with the kiss... such a beautiful way to end it. Again, I must say BRAVO!!!
Alright, that's enough chatter from me. I'm off to get some more tissues... *sniff*
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luseylottay
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Post by luseylottay on Sept 25, 2011 18:34:34 GMT -5
... That was amazing. I think that's the best way I can sum this up without exploding love all over you
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badluckcat
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I keep all my dreams under a lock and key. I?m so afraid that they will fly, away from me
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Post by badluckcat on Sept 25, 2011 22:58:18 GMT -5
... That was amazing. I think that's the best way I can sum this up without exploding love all over you I have to 100% agree with this. Loved it so much <333
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Post by gigi on Sept 26, 2011 11:29:08 GMT -5
Oh…oh now that’s not bloody fair…
This is epic! Be it the awkward ‘talk’ or Lucille’s heartbreaking grab for him just before he tries to leave… my lord, I think I actually sobbed out loud. If I wrote half this well…ghah!
Alright, you know how I just ranted about the difficulties of writing for Francoeur? You nail it! His babbling and stuttering, his jumps of logic- both completely justified if slightly faulty- its just adorable and really quite how I imagine him to be.
I am hopelessly in love with this story, the humanity and the humility of it. Even the little ticks of plot- Francoeur vs. ceiling and so forth- it’s like a drug! And that cliffhanger- damn luv…it’s not fair!
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Post by siffyleafylav on Sept 26, 2011 12:58:54 GMT -5
Oh…oh now that’s not bloody fair… This is epic! Be it the awkward ‘talk’ or Lucille’s heartbreaking grab for him just before he tries to leave… my lord, I think I actually sobbed out loud. If I wrote half this well…ghah! Alright, you know how I just ranted about the difficulties of writing for Francoeur? You nail it! His babbling and stuttering, his jumps of logic- both completely justified if slightly faulty- its just adorable and really quite how I imagine him to be. I am hopelessly in love with this story, the humanity and the humility of it. Even the little ticks of plot- Francoeur vs. ceiling and so forth- it’s like a drug! And that cliffhanger- damn luv…it’s not fair! All's fair in love and war" Said a great writer one time. Now now now! Gigi, feel no distress! It helps if you try picturing his confusion; all these new and confusing feelings, being in love without ever knowing it, feeling the cold burrnnnn of jealousy and hate without knowing the reason. And YES YOU FOUND IT! This is indeed NOT THE LAST you have seen of this one! I had to stop yesterday night, but woke up round one with an epiphany! The perfect cliffhanger, and it worked!
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Post by gigi on Sept 26, 2011 17:31:40 GMT -5
All's fair in love and war" Said a great writer one time. Now now now! Gigi, feel no distress! It helps if you try picturing his confusion; all these new and confusing feelings, being in love without ever knowing it, feeling the cold burrnnnn of jealousy and hate without knowing the reason. And YES YOU FOUND IT! This is indeed NOT THE LAST you have seen of this one! I had to stop yesterday night, but woke up round one with an epiphany! The perfect cliffhanger, and it worked! *La Sigh* ok ok- you have a point there…*pouts and mumbles something about still wanting to eat your brain* That’s exactly it! And you do it so damn well- the whole confusion mixed with frustration and moments of realization. You paint a very dark, rather deep version of him and I love it. it’s very, dare I say- human. *gasps* I LOVE those moments don’t you- you know when you’ve been stuck for ever and then out of nowhere you just wake up, or your daydreaming on a subway ride, or working on something entirely unrelated and BAHM!! Upside the head, just like that. And you think ‘why the hell didn’t I see it, it’s so damn obvious’…
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Post by gigi on Sept 26, 2011 18:09:33 GMT -5
Ok, please forgive the double post and the picture quality, but before I go posting any picture anywhere else I figured I owed this to you. I did this a little while ago after reading ch 4 and I started to imagine what had happened to Francoeur all alone out there in that big world while Lucille sat and waited (pined even >.>) for him to come home. Then I went and listened to one of my old rep. songs ‘Apres un Reve’ (‘After the Dream’)- a French classic in which the singer talks about a dream in which they saw a form so beautiful, a love so perfect they could not begin to describe and upon waking they weep, praying for the vision to return. And this is what I ended up with…so yeah, I blame you…so I thought I would share…
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Post by siffyleafylav on Sept 27, 2011 0:21:22 GMT -5
*le gasp* That is beautiful, you don't give yourself enough credit!
I feel like there is some hidden symbolism happening, like you can't tell which is the dreamer and who is the dream.
Absolutly glorious!
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comique
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Post by comique on Sept 27, 2011 21:47:08 GMT -5
I'm not the best when it comes to expressing emotions in words but ... this chapter ... this ... story ...
I'm in tears over it. The beautiful way your words express deep inner emotions of love ... Magnificent.
I have nothing else to say ... other then I'd like to see another chapter please. (Seriously, I'm completely speechless from this.)
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Post by siffyleafylav on Dec 4, 2011 14:24:24 GMT -5
Another chapter, please DO forgive me for the lateness, things just..stopped me from writting I guese. Enjoy, and here *passes tissueboxes* You might need soem, I did, at least. Attachments:
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Post by kkqt7 on Jan 7, 2012 16:47:02 GMT -5
I just want to say that I have fallen in love with this story so much, so fast!! It's absolutely beautiful!! The emotions are so strong they literally bring me to tears!! It's so touching and wonderful, this is a gift to fanfiction because it's just too perfect!!
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Post by siffyleafylav on Jan 7, 2012 18:45:54 GMT -5
^/////^ Oh my, thankyou!
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