luseylottay
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Post by luseylottay on Sept 8, 2011 18:37:47 GMT -5
That was an adorable third chapter <3 SEE, THE POWER OF NOT BEING BALD! AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA -shot- I see no reason, you comment confuses even my alter-ego, and she's not even real. I honestly have no idea why I put "see" at the beginning (sugar rush ;O) I was making a joke at the fact that Franc is bald, and thus, loves hair because it's so pretty! (especially Lucille's, duh)... But he can pull off the bald look... because he's a bug... and aww jeez man just forget I ever said anything o-o;
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comique
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Post by comique on Sept 8, 2011 20:23:49 GMT -5
/)^3^(\ FFFFF- OMGEESH adorable third chapter! ;D
Hmmm, feedback you say? Well, I'm thinking Francoeur should be honest with Lucille but be hesitant about it (maybe he's embarrassed with his eating habits?) And then Lucille can explain her situation ... delicately. Think of how you would tell a five year old about that stuff.
For some reason I can see a blood bank appearing in this story ... *shrug*
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greys13
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Post by greys13 on Sept 9, 2011 10:56:45 GMT -5
^ 0 ^ * Cry excited fan girl * Really very happy for the chapter, was excellent. Now what worries me the following episode will open with Lucille and Francoeur, she will be angry with him or to reach a mutual understanding .... The most important thing may be a third goal between them (remember that Francoeur returned appear in newspapers ) ... who will perhaps Raul or Maynott Prefect ( ).. will be a renewed threat .... better stop here, I am so up the next chapter ;D ;D ;D
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Post by siffyleafylav on Sept 11, 2011 9:23:04 GMT -5
Ooh you guys...you're gonna hate meee! ;D Attachments:
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Post by kazi15 on Sept 11, 2011 11:37:49 GMT -5
I'm honestly more anticipating your next update. Looks like our Franc isn't so innocent anymore, though.
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Post by NeonAzure on Sept 11, 2011 11:51:24 GMT -5
What's to hate? A little conflict is GOOD! Can't wait for more!
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luseylottay
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Post by luseylottay on Sept 11, 2011 12:22:07 GMT -5
That was so sad! I want more @=@
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Post by siffyleafylav on Sept 12, 2011 1:48:13 GMT -5
You guys, I'm stuck. I want to thank all of you who've helped me with the feedback, and especially the absolutely wonderful comments. But I'm stuck. I want to continue this story, VERY much, but I can't.I don't know how to go on! So far, I've dragged each and every one of you into this fiction, which has evolved into a uncontrolled spiral of a mess. How should I go on? Should I: let francoeur explain very timidly that his species do not only use blood for food, but also a source which enables them to mate, and because he doesn't know any better, he expects humans to be like that: feed on a few O+ and it's a shagging you'll get later. In this, he thinks Lucille slept with another man, and because he doesn't know he can love, feels betrayed on a very basic level. Or... Should I just write that since Francoeur feeds on blood, he was scared pants-less that if Lucille was bleeding in such proximity to him, he would start feeding on her, in result, kill her? Of course, I've hidden the two separate endings, which I'll work out more detailed if people want #1 or #2 I could do a poll, but I wouldn't want to spoil unnecessary things, and of course I'll end them both with a very, very, very tiny kiss, possibly a very wet one. I hope you guys still don't hate me for cutting the chapters so short, once the movie gets out I'll post them ALL on ff.net, and they'll be more...elaberate. Love you duckies!
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greys13
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Post by greys13 on Sept 12, 2011 11:42:51 GMT -5
I must say that your chapter fell short, but so is still excellent. And the choices you have given, I prefer the first option seems more interesting. You guys, I'm stuck. Should I: let francoeur explain very timidly that his species do not only use blood for food, but also a source which enables them to mate, and because he doesn't know any better, he expects humans to be like that: feed on a few O+ and it's a shagging you'll get later. In this, he thinks Lucille slept with another man, and because he doesn't know he can love, feels betrayed on a very basic level. ;D ;D ;D
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beccawolf16
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Post by beccawolf16 on Sept 12, 2011 13:25:30 GMT -5
Well, first off, let me applaud you in a job well done! Your first three chapters are really well written and I love your descriptivness. *claps*
Okay about your dilemma, I personally like the second one. It's the one that actually, to me, makes the most sense. I just don't think he would panic quite as much as he did, nor leave for quite as long if it was only what he thought in #1. But that's just me.
Then again, #1 is a much more interesting twist than #2, and would definatly catch anyone by surprise. So, I suppose it comes down to whether or not you want to go with the more consistant idea or the more intruiging one. No matter what it's still your decision. But I'd go with #2.
Whatever you choose, I'm still excited to see the next chapter!
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comique
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Post by comique on Sept 12, 2011 17:40:06 GMT -5
I agree with Becca, number 1 makes for a much more interesting story but 2 is more reasonable ... BUT who needs rationality when it comes to fanfics??? XD
I think the first one fits a lot better with where you left off. Talking about the look of betrayal in his eyes ... I would rather see #1.
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Post by gigi on Sept 12, 2011 23:15:40 GMT -5
Um…merry me please!
I can’t get enough of this- hell I worry now if the movie can live up to this, I’m bloody addicted. I don’t even know where to begin.
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beccawolf16
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Post by beccawolf16 on Sept 14, 2011 12:37:48 GMT -5
You know, I just realized something (hidden just in case): You can actually do both! You could have Francoeur explain that he ran away because he feeds on blood and was afraid of harming Lucille after smelling hers. Then he could go on to say he feels betrayed because he thinks the reason why Lucille had blood on hand was 'cause she was with another guy. Or something to that extent. There you go, two options in one. If you so choose to write it this way.
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kcobsessionftw
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Post by kcobsessionftw on Sept 14, 2011 14:21:48 GMT -5
I agree with Becca. You could go for the consistency of #2 and yet still have the 'lil lemon twist that is #1. I was actually going to suggest that myself until Becca beat me to it.
Either way, you have yourself an avid fan!
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Post by thelostzelda on Sept 14, 2011 22:07:35 GMT -5
there are no words for how much want I have for your fic right now.
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